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第8章 我可以如此绽放

“亲爱的同学们,我希望你们也能和我一样,爱上古诗文!”随着台下响起雷鸣般的掌声,我人生中第一次走上大舞台的演讲结束了,那颗悬着的心终于落下了。

走下舞台的时候,侧台的工作人员都给我竖起了大拇指,还有人指着我说:“她是最小的参赛者,听说才上初一。”我冲下舞台想给妈妈发微信报喜,却先收到妈妈发来的一张照片,家里的水仙花今天盛开了。这花一直愣愣地站在窗台上,不怎么长,我以为它今年冬天不会开花了。

我像极了这盆水仙,青涩了一个冬天,终于今天绽放了。

两个月前的一天,我代表我们年级去参加全校的演讲赛。当时整个初一就剩我一个选手了,我完完整整地说了一遍词,鞠躬准备下台,被一位老师叫住了:“同学,你的演讲问题很多,这个水平很难站上最终的舞台,我们要的是成熟的演讲选手,不是朗诵选手。”

我心里咯噔一下,正准备解释,旁边一位外校男评委冷冷地说:“还有,你吞字的问题太严重了,我几乎听不清你在说什么,这个问题不改,你下一关就得被淘汰。”

后面还有老师说什么我都没听到,真是觉得五雷轰顶,刚才还在为自己骄傲,现在这点优越感被敲得粉碎。

我难过地走回家,一路都在流眼泪,感觉自己特别失败,也担心下一关就被淘汰。

晚上我把自己关在小屋里,一遍又一遍地练。我想了个好方法,用手机把演讲录下来,自己听找问题,每一次都是听到一分钟我就狠狠地删了,重新录。因为真的像老师说的那样——吞字,语气不准确,调子还高。每天都是练到夜里十一点半,睡觉时嗓子都是哑的。早上起不来时,我总是发誓要退出这个比赛,晚上却又不自觉地一遍遍练。

有一天晚上,妈妈带回来几棵水仙,搬到了我的房间。妈妈说,水仙开花的时候,应该正好是演讲决赛的时候。我看了看花盆中的水仙,明明就是大蒜发芽了,这都能开花?好吧,我等着。

不断地练习演讲,不断地被打击,老师严格要求是为了让我最终绽放,我一直在咬牙坚持。调子渐渐准确了,演讲速度也一点点慢下来了。每天晚上练完演讲我都给水仙加点水,它却像睡着了一样没啥开花的迹象。

两个月后,我终于拿到演讲决赛的入场券,成为这次全校演讲大赛中年龄最小的选手。上台后,我突然小宇宙爆发了,一个字没错,所有的情感点都发挥圆满,我成功了!

我多像那些水仙花,外表虽然看不出什么变化,其实是无数次的历练最终让我化茧成蝶,让我凤凰涅槃,也让水仙花昂首怒放。

真高兴,我们同一天绽放!

I could Blossom in this Way

"Dear fellows,I hope you can fall in love with poetry,just like me!" With the thunderous applause,I finished my first speech on the big stage,and I felt so relieved.

As I stepped off the stage,the staff on the side gave me a thumbs-up. Someone pointed at me and said,"She's the youngest contestant. I hear that she's just a 7th-grader!" I rushed down the stage to send my mother the good news on WeChat. Instead of receiving her congratulations,I first received a picture of the daffodils in my home blooming on that day. It had been on the window sill for a long time without growing. I thought it would not bloom this winter.

Just like this pot of daffodils,I finally bloomed today after the whole winter.

Two months ago,on behalf of our grade,I participated my school's speech contest,and I was the only contestant left in grade 7. As I finished my speech,bowed and was ready to go away,a teacher told me,"You have a lot of problems in this speech. With this kind of performance,it is very difficult for you to stand on the final stage. We want a mature orator,not a reciter."

My heart skipped a beat. As I was about to explain,a male judge from another school said coldly,"Also,your articulation is quite terrible,I could hardly understand you. This problem will definitely prevent you from the next round."

I could hardly hear what he said later,because my mind went completely blank. I was proud of myself when I was speaking,but I felt I was reduced to the ground by the judges.

I walked home with tears rolling down from my eyes. I felt that it was a complete failure,worrying about being eliminated in the next round.

That night,I locked myself in my bedroom and kept practicing over and over again. I came up with a good idea to record the speech with my smartphone and listened to the recordings to find problems. But I realized there were so many problems such as incorrect reductions,wrong tones,and high intonations,just as the judge said. I could identify so many of them just in the first one minute of the recordings. Every night I practiced till half-past eleven and lost my voice before I slept.

I felt so bad every morning because of the lack of sleep and felt like quitting the contest. But I convinced myself every time and continued to practice every evening.

One night,my mom brought back some daffodils and put them in my room. She said they would blossom around the time of the speech final. I looked at the daffodils in the flowerpot. They were just like sprouted garlics. Could they even blossom?Well,I would wait and see.

I kept practicing my speech and kept being criticized by the strict teacher. But I just gritted my teeth and bore it. Gradually my tone became accurate,and the pace slowed down a little bit. Every night after practice,I always watered the daffodils,but they showed no sign of blossoming as if they were asleep.

Two months later,I finally entered the final,and I became the youngest contestant in the whole school. On the stage,I punched above my weight and made not a single mistake! All the emotions were performed perfectly. I succeeded!

I finally knew that I was just like the daffodils,from which people couldn't see any changes,but I eventually rose like a phoenix from the ashes and fully blossomed just like daffodils.

I was so delighted because we blossomed on the same day!

写作历程

这是我初中一年级的一篇期末作文,当时拿到这个题目,我立刻想到老师讲的双线结构,一条线写我参加比赛的整个过程,另一条线写水仙花成长到绽放的一个过程,两条线交叉使用。今天看来这篇文章写得并不成熟,但是当时我自己写完还挺满意的,在考场上也得了高分。

这样的双线写作法需要提前想出一种东西来,比如说经历了一年的一个比赛,我们可以跟外面的花草树木放在一起,像一棵树伴着我成长;或者说家里的小狗陪伴我度过一些艰难的事情;或是生病的时侯身边有人照顾我。总之就是两个看上去并不是必须放在一个空间里的事物,人为地把它们放在一篇作文中,这样的文章可以显得比较“高大上”,亲爱的小朋友们,你们也可以试试呀。

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